Unfortunately, I did not receive feedback on my Elevator Pitch #2. However, looking back at my Elevator Pitch #2, I think it is best to incorporate all three elements of "persuasion tools" in my pitch. I noticed in my second Elevator Pitch that I was leaning a lot towards the pathos. The pathos appeal is designed to persuade the audience and assert the argument with emotion. I decided this time around to include more elements in my presentation—for example, a statistic to emphasize the importance of my initiative to reduce student loan debt. I used my statistic of how much debt is contributed to student loan debt in the United States as a whole because it provides a more extensive scope about the amount of money that people suffer through paying their way to an education. I think it was beneficial this time around gathering information about the United States as a whole because currently, I am located in Florida. Being Florida has an advantage in which it can start a movement that can eventually pave the way for several states in our country to follow.
Hi Sophia,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your elevator pitch video. You hooked me with your passion and tone. I wanted to keep watching to hear more about how your initiative would work. The statistics you shared are compelling and really set the tone for the need for financial assistance. If we had another elevator pitch, I would recommend sharing more details about the initiative you are pitching. That would help me better visualize your product.
Bridget